Not everyone’s a critic!
Thanks to all the wonderful people who have taken the time to read and comment on my work!
Here are some great comments from visitors to my blog. I’ll be sure to add more
if you write them!
Special thanks to the fabulous writers at the
What Pegman Saw short-fiction writing challenges.
You have been so encouraging and supportive over the past few years and
have penned so many thoughtful, insightful, and well-written comments here!
If you recognize your own comment and want more specific recognition,
or if you want it taken down, please let me know! Comments edited for brevity.
Faulted her, for wandering the streets alone?
(Even in broad daylight!)
Above everything else in your story THIS says so much. I only point that out because everything else says a lot. Well done.
AliciaOn short-short Don’t Ask, Don’t Tell
I really enjoyed this piece, well written, thought provoking, and deep layered. It surprises (and horrifies) me that even today people often wonder what the victim did to “deserve it.”
BrendaOn short-short Don’t Ask, Don’t Tell
What a horrible event and such a callous view from tourists. So many people see it from such a small point of view.
“Mostly Mexicans,” and
“Afterwards, a dozen ships’ hulls shaded the whispering beach.
As if haphazardly parked, by some drunken valet.”
really pack an extra punch. Very powerful!
DawnOn short-short Mostly Mexicans
What a lovely story Andrea. So visually appealing and emotionally poignant.
Girl in NiagaraOn short-short Midnight Tea
Intriguing start then the story unfolds really well. I want her to be safe for obvious reasons but also because I can imagine the homecoming and I hope you write it!
JillOn short-short Never
Wow, I love this piece. It seriously gave me goosebumps. Read it three times! The simplicity of the language belies the power in each line. I could see and hear and feel it all.
KarenOn short-short Big Sky
I’ve had the exact same thought as you with all of the furor over children “falling behind” if they’re not in school being a false premise. In many instances, children learn in spite of school, not because of it.
LizOn short-short Falling Behind
Wonderful language to paint a picture of a disturbed mind. Well told. Disturbing.
MargaretOn short-short The Light Monk
Beautifully written and left a real shudder – which I think was your intention!
MirandaOn short-short Due For a Haircut
Very well-written story, Andrea. I love this line: “To watch humanity steam and froth, warmed by the neon’s indulgent glow.”
Ms JadeOn short-short Invisible
Yikes – nice job with this respectful Veteran’s piece. Made me sad – and grateful for what our servicemen have done and still do.
PriorhouseOn short-short Good Fortune
Andrea, I love this poem. It scratches for attention despite the poet in me trying to look away from its truths.
The rose photo is superb
RobynOn poem To the Poet
I haven’t seen a pair of pinking shears (as we call them) in years. Good story, enjoyed it.
SandraOn the short short Seamstress
Not sure I understand the numerology bit but I too envisaged a male, overly obsessed and paranoid monkish figure who took to numbers because of his failure to interact with others. Funny how a few words portray a character
siobhanOn the short short Numerology
“Definitely not fruit punch!”
The Dark NetizenOn the short short Monster Mash
“King of the Masquerade” is a great line! This poem makes me think of the song “Hotel California.”
Tokens of CompanionshipOn the poem Smoky
We humans are pretty good at sword fighting and not so good at dealing with invisible threats. Great poem!
Tokens of CompanionshipOn the poem Horsemen
That last line is achingly beautiful, Andrea. It’s sad to envisage her plight, but hey who are we to comment?
VaradOn the short-short Sooner
I loved your photo of “Butterfly pea plant blooming blue…”
I very much like the fact that non-human nature has gotten a little break during our COVID-related slow-downs — although I am also aware that millions of families cannot pay their rent/mortgage/food bills.
Deep breath in. Deep breath out.
WillOn poem Quarantine
How whisky can create perspective for things we dislike. Nicely done
BillOn short-short Ice Don’t Keep
Your lovely poem is a beautiful tribute to your parent’s love for each other. Very nicely done! I’m sure they are together, enjoying year 61.
BrendaOn poem Sixty Years
I do like this reflection on homeschooling an autistic child, it so chimes in with our own philosophy and experience.
CalmgroveOn essay Not Quite up to Snuff
I thought it was cool the way you added the art deco theme. That added a whole new dimension to the poem!
DebraOn poem Bombay Deco
Boom! Direct hit!!!
LizOn poem Debatable
I really enjoyed your two characters. So different, yet drawn to the same field. And who knows? Maybe, somewhere, a Pascal will arise to cap the pump 🙂
LindaOn short-short Double-Blind
Ah, the student beats the master! Great Story!
JelliOn short-short ZugZwang
A foretelling, farsighted well- constructed piece of poetry. A good rhythmic feel.
JohnOn short-short Green Land
Brilliant – even better read out loud!
KeithOn short-short Danged Cow
For some reason, I’m seeing this poem in the Childcraft book of poems for children, illustrated with a big, fat orange-faced bully in various postures of temper-tantruming.
LizOn poem Stolen
I love this. So sweet and passionate and illicit. And that description of frozen snow – just perfect. Well done indeed, Andrea
LynnOn the short-short Rendezvous
setting sun weaves threads through the turquoise sky…nice line. Lovely story
NeelOn short-short Adverse Possession
I don’t think she needs to choke back the smile. We will see the rainbow again, and we’ll smile.
NeilOn short-short Hope
This was a joy to read. I loved the lines, Dune sunflowers smiled on either side and Waves occasionally lapping her toes, like a friendly puppy. Makes you want to get away and be somewhere peaceful too.
Notes to WomenOn short short The Sandy Kingdom
This is one of the best statements/laments on climate change I’ve read. Stunning.
RochelleOn poem Inevitable
I loved the water giggling through gentrified neighborhoods. Beautifully written and evocative piece.
RochelleOn short-short Ghosts
I loved the name Filcher’s Row. The appearance by the heretofor “silent” partner made this a great cliff hanger.
RussellOn the short short Filcher’s Row
I absolutely love these two lines: ‘white candles on a layer cake’ and ‘the last man to ever upstage her.’ I am SO CURIOUS – how does he upstage her?! Why?! Does he mean to?! Please continue this story!
I would LOVE to know what happens next so when you do, please send it my way!
TaraOn the short short 1977
Ouch, what a punch in that final line. You set us up with nostalgic memories and then reveal the darkness beneath them. Nicely done
The Reclining GentlemanOn the short short Boundary Waters
Oh goodness this so scary. Hope your husband heals as quickly as possible and that the rest of your family remains healthy.
The Wife of BathOn the poem Winter’s Toll
Very tenderly told. You sound like a very loving and devoted mother, and your children are blessed to have you.
VioletOn the essay Our Stems Are Fragile
He sounds creepy to me – don’t go with him Magda !
Woman Walking MaxOn the short-short Mousetrap
A homely romantic tale. Good to know that romance is not dead.
Woman Walking MaxOn the short-short A Pearl of Great Price
I think indeed the last stage of cars is getting close… the hood ornament is a great metaphor of the first decline.
BjörnOn poem Figureheads
Loved the rhythm of this, and the inherent truth.
CEOn poem A Word
There are always those who feel they are indestructible. Nothing like a roof ripping off to show them what’s what!!
DaleOn short-short Never Underestimate A Woman
Such a tragedy indeed, Andrea; I can’t imagine who was not moved by the sight of that beautiful and historic place burning. I loved it there, and can’t even fathom it. Your story really captures the emotional impact.
DawnOn short-short Fire Escape
That’s a pretty ominous last line! I hope she’s not planning on walking home alone…
DralimanOn short-short Correction
Really excellent. We all have to examine our response to recent events. I hope she will open up her view of the world and find a way to make a contribution. We are all learning we can do that without necessarily having to take to the streets.
The rhythm here really adds to the anxiety level, well done! It reminded me of Poe’s the Raven, It doesn’t hurt that I’m not so great about highway driving as it is, and I absolutely hate winding twisting roads and cliffs. SHIVER!
JoyOn the poem Flatlander
Love this. She is such a character. Wily. What a driver!! Haha
LaurieOn the short-short Old Junk
Extremely violent symbolism – an interesting take.
LizyOn the short-short The Night Before
Great poem. I love how you captured the elements and her relationship with them and that arrival of a sibling at the end – welcome or not? Well done. Andrea
LynnOn the poem Mackinac
Great last line delivered perfectly suddenly.
MichaelOn short-short Boundary Waters
I never knew about Josephine’s ancestry, or her connection with roses. I once learned from an opera program booklet that in several languages (including English, of course) ‘rose’ is an anagram of ‘eros’.
NemorinoOn poem Of Roses
There’s some delightful writing in this. “The falling mercury, snow’s harbinger,” Good grief, when was the last time I read the word harbinger? Lovely choice of words, exquisite. And “The pompous, popish napkins folded their arms in disapproval. Or disbelief.” Some discreet alliteration, and such an original and vivid description.
And, of course, your last line. But you already know that’s a cracker. “Sparkling opacity” – wow!
PennyOn short-short Snowed
I’m so impressed you can remember what you were doing 15 years ago. I’m lucky if I remember what I had for lunch! Thanks for the list of Word Camps — I didn’t know such existed. Ditto for the Wapuu page. You write really well and no typos — hooray!!!
Southern Rural RouteOn the essay Fifteen Candles
I didn’t think the lights on the water was a Christmas tradition; now I do. Nicely done.
StuOn short short Riverside Luminaria
I could hear the noise in my skull! Well done.
TannilleOn short short Girls Night Out
Oh no, no tequila ?!
TannilleOn short short Never Underestimate A Woman
“All your questions shall be answered, then,
Though your knuckles rap no more.”
Love the macabre humor.
Tokens of CompanionshipOn poem The Other Side
What a challenge you’ve had. And how lucky your boys are to have someone as strong, sensible and resilient as you.
SueOn the short-short Priorities
That is such an inspiring intro.
YarnspinerrOn the Welcome page
Beautiful word smithy!