{This is a response to a prompt from What Pegman Saw, a writing challenge based on Google Maps Street View. This week we are in Big Sky, Montana. I composed a simple poem based on the picture shown. Hope you enjoy it. The sparcity of punctuation is intentional. Thank you for the prompt and for reading!}
Big sky
Small man
Small fry
Big plan
Up high
Campfire
Your heart’s
Desire
Alone
At last
No then
No past
Bright blue
Pale green
What could
It mean?
Thoughts whirr
Flies buzz
You don’t
It does
Climb steps
Gaze far
Blue hills
No car
Door squeaks
Cold draft
None fore
None aft
Wide room
Cold Cot
Gas lamp
(It’s hot)
Wood desk
White stack
Stiff chair
Sore back
Pick up
That pen!
Alive
Again.
Copyright 2018 Andrea LeDew
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This has a lovely rhythm to it, like a mantra, Andrea. A writers’ mantra – the sacrifice, the pleasure, the pain. Great take on the prompt.
Your praise means so much to me, Kelvin. I’m glad it struck a chord.
What a wonderful rhythm you create her, Andrea. Somehow even through the sparcity, you say so much. Lovely ending – coming ‘home’ to writing, such a lovely sentiment.
Thank you Lynn. “Sparce” pretty much sums it up. I think I was heavily influenced by Longmire, a cowboy series about a taciturn sheriff, set in Montana, and by the men of few words whom I have known in my life. As for the rhythm, i think it was dictated by the need for the piece to be vertical, like the mountains.
Voice and presentation matched the subject perfectly Andrea
You take us nicely through a range of sensory descriptions. I like the way the poem tells a genuine story of spiritual refreshment.
Thank you Penny. I thought that the thrill of putting pen to paper might be familiar to this audience. ?
This is a great piece. Love the cadence.
Thanks Josh. Language seems unnecessarily complex–or perhaps just unnecessary–in such settings.
Wow, I love this piece. It seriously gave me goosebumps. Read it three times! The simplicity of the language belies the power in each line. I could see and hear and feel it all.
Thank you Karen. That really means alot to me.