{This is a response to a prompt from Friday Fictioneers, limited to 100 words. Thanks for the prompt and thank you for stopping by to read!}
“Who’s ‘at?” Amos squinted, silver brows furrowed against the lake’s sparkle.
The seaplane’s skis alighted. As flawless and practiced as a sparrow.
“Idiot Boxer. Him again. Him and his heroics.” Julian’s head shook. He spat, matter-of-factly.
“What is it now?” huffed Amos.
“Didn’t ya hear, on the radio? Lumberjack sawing, five stories high. Belt gave way. Up yonder.” Julian jutted his chin out, toward Mount Blessed.
“Bull. Shit. What we need lumberjacks for? Nobody uses paper, anymore!”
“Dangerous job, that one.”
“Lumberjack’s? Or Boxer’s?”
“Both. Gotta have a death wish, y’ask me.”
“Truth. Well, better hop to it. The O.R.’s filthy.”
OR is filthy so you better clean it quickly! This would be unfortunate for the next patient! Nice story!
The OR’s filthy – get busy! Your story is great. WOW – things change in a blink of an eye – The pilot rescues people! Nice!
Thanks Nan!
The voices here are brilliant.
Thanks Lisa!
Yes boxing can be a risky sport so does the job of a lumber jack.
This is one point where the low word count did not serve me well. ?Boxer is the nickname for the pilot, who is a daredevil in his seaplane, scouring the mountain country for people to save. His job is nearly as dangerous as the lumberjacks.
I really enjoyed the voices in your story. Nicely done!
Thanks Brenda!
What characters! I think they have more to say.
Thanks Tanille!
These two characters immediately came to life. You did a great job with the dialogue.
Thanks granonine!
I liked the characters and the dialogue. I’ll need to look up a boxer, though, because I thought they were fighters.
Boxer is supposed to be the pilot’s nickname. I chose it because it sounded tough.
Dear Andrea,
Sounds like germ warfare on the horizon. Interesting voices.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks Rochelle!
Great voices for the two characters. Unfortunately, I didn’t understand what was happening at all!
I was imagining two nurses or doctors at a small hospital in a wooded but remote spot near the mountains, watching a sea-plane carrying an injured lumberjack touch down on the water, as in the prompt.
Boxer is the name of the pilot, a daredevil who is well-known to them for risking his own life, to save others.
Dont know if they use the title expression “Life Flight”in other English-speaking countries, but here in the US it is used to describe when a plane is called (rather than a ground ambulance)to take a severely injured person from a remote or distant scene of an accident in order to get them life-saving treatment as soon as possible.
I also loved the dialect, Andrea. It made for a great story. I’ll just stay here in the city with good hospitals, thank you. I hope the seaplane is taking the injured lumberjack to a good hospital. That O.R. sounds past restoring. —- Suzanne
Thank youPatricia. Sounds like the wiser course.
Loved the dialect, it gave me a nice mental picture of them.
Thanks draliman. It helps for the word count, when your characters already speak mostly in contractions!
Oh oh, those are the surgeons? Remind me not to get injured in that town….
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I think I detect sepsis on the horizon.
Heaven forbid!
This was a great exchange. Can just imagine them rocking on the porch.. But I ain’t going to their operating room!
Me neither, Dale!
That has the feel of real dialogue about it
Thanks Neil!
Great dialogue – great voices!
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O R is filthy that flirting with death, great chatter
Poor lumberjack might have survived only to die on the table! ?
Great voices.
Thanks Iain.