As if my wheelchair hadn’t done so already, my age made me invisible.
Any exhibition here would have drawn a crowd of rich, idle socialites, eager to see and be seen. But with such a godless cause to sweep them in, they thronged. Arch upon arch, dome upon dome. The place burst with vainglory.
All to a secular aim. A parade of nudes, a parody of God. I clutched at my crucifix, out of habit.
No one knew that Sister Christopher Joseph had kicked me out of the convent, after discovering my unseemly zeal for chemistry.
Soon all would know.
(Sorry, a little late getting on the bandwagon for Friday Fictioneers. This is last week’s prompt!
Perhaps by Friday I will have figured out the process a bit better! I heard about this group on the podcast
Writer’s on Writing, on which the author Claire Fuller was interviewed. )
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You packed a lot into a 100 word story. What an interesting and scary character. She gives new meaning to the expression looks can be deceiving–who would suspect a nun in a wheelchair?
Yes. You know i love to watch mystery shows, especially the British series, like Detective Morse and his progeny, midsomer Murders, Poirot and Ms Marple dramatizations etc.. It’s gotten to the point where as soon as any religious figures enter the scene, my husband and I look at each other and say, “That’s who did it!”
You have a really interesting character here Andrea. I’d love to know more about her! Welcome to Friday Fictioneers.
Thank you! I’ll have to work her in again sometime.:)
You give your story a good start with “As if my wheelchair hadn’t done so already, my age made me invisible.” You illustrate the arrogant mindset of your main character very well. With your conclusion, I had to think quite hard before I understood what was going to happen, and I wonder whether every reader will follow your train of thought.
As far as ‘Friday Fictioneers’ goes – welcome! The prompt is posted on Rochelle’s site every Wednesday, and the earlier you are able to link your story, the more reads and likes you are likely to receive. You’ll find that a good way to use FF is to comment on other peoples’ stories, and read the comments they give you. I’ve been participating for a year now, and It’s really helped me grow as a writer.
Good luck!
Pennygadd51, thanks so much for all your good advice. I’m glad you liked the opening line and the way the mindset of the character was communicated. This is my first time out of the gate, and I am in awe of all of you. I had no idea how difficult it was, to whittle a passage down to 100 words! Next time, I will definitely spend more time working on my parting thought, to be sure to leave a clearer message! Hope to improve as you did!
Wow! Has it really been a year, Penny? So glad you joined. 😀
Better late than never, Andrea 🙂 This is a very fine opus for you. The tension is there, the mystery is there, the zeal is there. Good job.
Thank you. So glad you liked it!
A nun with a chemistry interest and a dangerous idea! Great character.
Thank you! I have a feeling I have seen her before somewhere, but not in this context…
Hello again, Andrea,
One of the most entertaining aspects of Friday Fictioneers is the interaction between writers, that of receiving and giving comments on each other’s stories. Also reading the comments of others on each other’s stories is a way of interaction. Perhaps there’s a way in settings you could adjust your blog so your readers can read the comments?
Shalom,
Rochelle
Rochelle thank you for the tip! I have lowered the drawbridge accordingly. So please,everyone, give me all your thoughts!
Dear Andrea,
Actually, you’re not too late to jump on the bandwagon. The prompt goes live every Wednesday at 02:30 AM CDT and runs to the following Tuesday at 6:55 PM. So you still have a little over 24 hours before the link closes. Not to worry. I took the liberty of linking your story to the inLinkz list or as one of our FF’rs calls it, the Hollywood Squares.
Your packed a lot of story into a 100 words. Well done. I look forward to reading more from you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you Rochelle. This a real gem of a writing group. I loved reading all the entries so far. Look forward to more.